twentysomething and clueless

Wednesday, March 5, 2008

I walked past my shadow twice today.
It was dragging its feet,
faint on the sidewalk from the weak winter sun.

So tired from late nights, unsatisfying jobs,
pretending to be a grown up, pretending not to care;
my entire being is begging
for a deep, dreamless slumber to rest my weary
head, heart, body.
“Please, please, please,”
they’re begging,
“give me what I want.”

Discontent and disconnect
wear me out.
"Please, please, please,"
I beg,
"give me what I want."

© Copyright Clueless Cat @http://twentysomethingandclueless.blogspot.com

3WW words: rest, sidewalk, twice

Labels: 3WW, poem

posted by Shopgirl at 3:51 PM

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At March 5, 2008 at 4:46 PM, Truefaith1963 said:

Great piece CC. I hope you get what you want soon =)

At March 5, 2008 at 5:03 PM, World So Wide said:

My best wishes for an end to discontent and disconnect to you! :)

At March 5, 2008 at 5:11 PM, Anonymous said:

You know what the Rolling Stones say:

"You can't always get what you want ... But if you try some time, well you might find you get what you need."

Wishing you improvement on a grand scale!

At March 5, 2008 at 8:03 PM, Jane Doe said:

Love it, I can so relate to being discontent with life! Great use of the prompt words.

At March 5, 2008 at 9:01 PM, paisley said:

i so wanna say ..."welcome to real life"...

At March 5, 2008 at 11:49 PM, PJD said:

Spring is around the corner. Somehow it always renews when I'm feeling like that after a long winter. Lovely imagery in the first several lines especially. Happy 3WW!

At March 6, 2008 at 12:02 AM, Sherry said:

I enjoyed this so much...this has been such a misery of a winter and I loved the first stanza!!

At March 6, 2008 at 12:08 AM, anthonynorth said:

Sometimes I'm so tired I feel no more than my shadow.
An excellent post.

At March 6, 2008 at 1:43 AM, JenBun said:

I love the title here... "Words of a Malcontent." Telling, beautiful, vaguely haunting. Love it.

At March 6, 2008 at 4:51 AM, Norma said:

This is wonderful. I love what you did with the 3 clues/hints.

At March 6, 2008 at 5:20 AM, Tumblewords: said:

Wow! This sounds like life... :) Nifty words!

At March 6, 2008 at 6:19 AM, Anonymous said:

Very well done. The inner pacing of this makes us feel the words as if we are saying them, writing them.

At March 6, 2008 at 9:50 AM, Christine Swint said:

I love these first two lines-

I walked past my shadow twice today.
It was dragging its feet,

Very creative!

I can feel the sleepiness through the internet....

At March 6, 2008 at 10:11 PM, gautami tripathy said:

Good work with the words!

walking the sidewalk

At March 6, 2008 at 10:25 PM, lissa said:

I like this. something I would have write but probably won't sound as good.

At March 7, 2008 at 11:03 AM, TC said:

I swear, two weeks in a row I've felt like you've read my mind.

At March 7, 2008 at 11:40 AM, Bone said:

Great opening stanza. Set the mood and made me anxious to read the rest.

My times of discontentment tend to happen much more often in winter than summer.

At March 7, 2008 at 1:20 PM, WriterKat said:

I love the imagery of a shadow's dragging feet. Nice job!

At March 12, 2008 at 3:08 AM, Christine Gail said:

Great use of the three words. I loved the image of a shadow dragging it's feet. Much enjoyed reading this.